Poor Imp

Hullo Twitter--or Wooster. I rather like the name Twooster, actually, er, as long as you don't mind. ^_^ Pardon me for beginning on an impertinent note. It's not always the ...

Sinister Jigster, my sincerest thanks. I will make note of the diction in repetition... Quashed and squashed a problem then? Ah, I had thought I merely had Teresa saying quashed--as ...

There's still something frayed in the finish--as if it doesn't quite set its feet down again, after the flashback/recurrence of what happened. And yet what precedes it is definitely more ...

Thanks--again--Snoink, very much. ^_^ Ah, it seems both you and Icaruss have caught that one paragraph. And I rather felt its disorder went with the order of the piece. Er, ...

Do you know, part of its pacing--especially the oddity in sentence length, or added adverbs--sounds like you're trying too hard . Let it be. If you go back to it, ...

Oy, don't apologise for your impressions, da? Any earnest response is worth at least the time it takes to listen. Anyhow, thanks Icaruss. Doubtless, it's an aspect of our preferences ...

Ha, I rather think you're think you're right, Snoink. Er, very much so in the area of similes and needing to be a larger idea. Somehow, it came out as ...

Just briefly-- The transitions from dibbun's innocence to ill, is a bloody lot smoother, and more eerie. No doubt the language the two use is also more smooth. ^_^ Both ...

Thank you, Clau - very much, in all honesty. It seems I need reminding of the worth of writing; I've been thinking lately my words are rather dull and useless. ...

A million thanks, my Imp! *gives whole box of cookies* I've always been a little unsatisfied with this scene and I think you targeted the problem that I couldn't see. ...

Ha - the Mesh strikeout addition is hilarious. (''...[s]transmission[/s] email...") ^_^ IMP

Privyet , Imp. Glad I found this - impish poetry always a delight, even if its not your preferred style (you've got an inborn tilt, I think, towards black alleys, ...

Lightly edited, on punctuation. IMP

Lovely poetic prose...but yes, really ought to be under prose forum, I think. ^_^ Moved to Other Fiction

...either there or in "Other". But I think we'll go with Poetry for this. So Moved to Other Poetry . IMP